Never Forget, Never Forgive
by Rami Efal
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5 comments + 6 replies
Posted by: Rami Efal
09:17am / Aug 14, 2009
09:17am / Aug 14, 2009
Thanks, John. This story can and will get messier before it is finally resolved. This is the first half of the 1st act. I am working simultanously on the next chapter as well as on the ending and it's good to have your feedback.
Posted by: Tim Hamilton
10:23am / Aug 14, 2009
10:23am / Aug 14, 2009
It's still just great! Have to read it slow and enjoy. Look fwd to more of this.
Posted by: Michel Fiffe
11:49am / Aug 14, 2009
11:49am / Aug 14, 2009
Truly fantastic, Rami. I like the changes/additions you've made. It's a stronger work all the way through.
Technically, it's funny how you use modern technology to achieve such an organic and kinetic feel. The staging, which is a job in itself, flows well. The fight scene had moments of quiet refinement, owing more to ballet than brawls.
Your hard work has paid off and it shows!
Technically, it's funny how you use modern technology to achieve such an organic and kinetic feel. The staging, which is a job in itself, flows well. The fight scene had moments of quiet refinement, owing more to ballet than brawls.
Your hard work has paid off and it shows!
Posted by: Rami Efal
03:50pm / Aug 14, 2009
03:50pm / Aug 14, 2009
Thanks for taking the time, Michel. I really could not have been doing this without the technology. Fight scenes are fun and I get all worked up on testosterone...
Posted by: Si Fraser
01:28pm / Aug 14, 2009
01:28pm / Aug 14, 2009
Astonishing work Rami. It's a real joy to see this pop up, your skill and storytelling intelligence really shine through.
Posted by: Rami Efal
02:18pm / Aug 14, 2009
02:18pm / Aug 14, 2009
Thanks Simon. It feels like it is writing and telling itself, I just need to get out of the way. The characters and scenes change all the time and Rami has to suck it in, step back and let the kids exhaust themselves and, yes, change the scene again or add another line. Hopefuly some of this debris makes sense! I have nothing to do with it... Other than collect the compliments, that is. Thank you!
Posted by: Tim Hall
10:03am / Aug 31, 2009
10:03am / Aug 31, 2009
Holy crap, fell behind a bit but back now. The panels with the rat > through the bars, and near the end that blank lower left space took my breath away. The depiction of violence, the bloody swipes through the air--just spectacular all around.
Posted by: Rami Efal
10:14am / Aug 31, 2009
10:14am / Aug 31, 2009
Thank you Tim. Next week I'll post the end of this first act. I was surprised how much the violence came out graphic and I hope it comes through as serving a purpose -- it has to be bad enough for the characters to WANT to END IT.
11:07pm / Aug 13, 2009